Tips for Staying Healthy---draft 1
Health is the most important thing in the world. For example, I am wealthy but I am not healthy then I can't enjoy any wealth. Now that health is important, how about staying healthy. According to my experience: First, you must do exerise. Exerice is good for your body, and it can help you burn the calorie. Second, you can't eat too much junk food. Junk food is not good for the body and it has much oil which can make you get fatter. Third, you have to stay in a good mood. If you are happy, you don't think negative things. Happiness make the world more beautiful. If you are moody, all you do may get worse. So staying in a good mood is the key to health. Here are three tips for staying healthy. Let's try these tips.

7 Comments:
"how to" stay healthy 吧!不過…
結論還滿讚的
how about staying healthy=>and how to stay healthy?我覺得比較好ㄟ
If you are happy, you don't think negative things.和 Happiness make the world more beautiful.
這兩句的中間再加一句話會不會比較好?
you don't think negative things, and......之類的
1.For example, I am wealthy but I am not healthy then I can't enjoy any wealth我覺得for example用think about it
2.Now that health is important, how about staying healthy有重複感因為開頭就是它,我覺得可以直接用But how can we stay heath.
3.So staying in a good mood is the key to health要加the在health前面
First, you must do exerise. Exerice
是exercise
So staying in a good mood is the key to health.
用to 好怪歐 for比較好巴
how about staying healthy->how to stay healthy..我建議啦!!
寫的不錯唷!!
I am wealthy but I am not healthy then I can't enjoy any wealth.要不要加個標點符號
你的exercise也拼錯了^^"少了個c呢
Happiness "make" the world more beautiful.加s
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