We are lovers---draft1
George and Mary are lovers. George wanted to marry Mary. But Mary's parents didn't agree the matter. Because her parents thought George couldn't earn a lot of money then Mary will not live well. Moreover, her parents didn't allow Mary to meet George. Mary couldn't suffer the infinite pain. She tried to call George, but her mother prevented her calling. For her great love, she decided to call George when her mother was taking a shower. Mary was so sad and weeping for their love.Mary said that she was powerless to keep in touch. George said that you could contact with me stealthily. And then he said that if we couldn't do this method, we only had one way''an elopement''. So they decided to elope. No matter what an aftermath was. They knowed they had no choice.
posted by 許雅婷 @ 5:58 AM
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Marry mary......Ha!ha
George said that you could contact
George said that she...
George said,"You could....
he said that if we couldn't do
he said that if they...
And then he said that if we couldn't do this method,
我會用
And then he said that if they didn't have any choice
we only had one way''an elopement''
they.......
寫的還不錯
好連續劇的劇情...
mary's parents...agree the matter
agree後面要加介係詞吧?!
好像有兩種with and to忘了差別在哪
加油 去查吧 達叔
Mary was so sad and weeping for their love."Mary" said that she was powerless to keep in touch.
第二個Mary(註名出來的地方)可以用She感覺比較順
原來我們都是走"三立"(本土劇or偶像劇)路線的呀...
好鄉土味阿!!
不過還不錯啦!!!
1. George said that she could contact with me stealthily.
2. And then he said that if "they" couldn't do this method, "they" only had one way
天下第一味…讚…
1.No matter what an aftermath was應該是no matter how
2.knowed應該是knew
3.有很多句子重複的感覺
4.劇情真的很爛
agree "with"
keep in touch "with George"
elope "with her lover"
George said that "you" →he
And then he said that if "we" →they
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