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Monday, April 16, 2007

Autobiography(1~2)---draft1

In 1990, I was born in Tainan city. My name is Ya-ting Hsu. There are four people in my family. My father is a straightforward and hard working person. My mother is a earnest person. She is a career woman, but she also must do chores. And they always tell me healthy is essential. This sentence gives me very strong influence. My brother is a smart person. He is a college student. Sometimes he teaches me Math in order to I can get a good grade. And I am s student who study in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School.

I am a optimistic and easygoing girl. No matter what difficult thing happened, I always look on the bright side. And listening to music and singing the song are my hobbies. I also see the movie, especially the comedy. Because these things can make me feel pleasure. When I have the stress of examination, I need to relieve my mind. I think living sadly can not live well moreover life is a long road I have to cross, why do not I live happily in the world.

9 Comments:

Blogger FawnYma said...

1.My mother is "an" earnest person
2.but she also "does" chores
3.Sometimes he teaches me Math in order "that" I can get a good grade.
4.And I am "a" student
5. I am "an" optimistic and easygoing girl.
阿達妳這個大笑話…哈哈哈…

7:05 AM  
Blogger Celia said...

"And they always tell me healthy is essential." healthy 是形容詞,應該用health才對,還有,這個句子出現兩個動詞!

9:39 PM  
Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said...

My mother is a earnest person>>an
I am a optimistic and easygoing girl.>>an
And they always tell me healthy is essential.>>應該要be healthy
in order to I can>>to 改that
Because these things can make me feel pleasure.>>好像藥改can pleasure me
sadly can not live well moreover life is >>;moreover,

7:05 AM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

1..He is a college student. Sometimes he teaches me Math in order "to" I can get a good grade.->改成that
2..I am "s" student ->這是什麼ㄚ!!妳應該是按錯了吧!是a..
3..I am "a" optimistic and easygoing girl->an
你的結尾寫的真有道理!!

7:16 AM  
Blogger Vivian said...

真是令人感動
難怪你每天都那麼開心

9:42 AM  
Blogger Ryuka(暐) said...

I am "s" student
應該是I am "a" student

6:47 PM  
Blogger Butterfly said...

1.And they always tell me healthy is essential.要用health

2.This sentence gives me very strong influence我覺得可以用This sentence have a very strong influence on me

3.Sometimes he teaches me Math in order to I can get a good grade基本上in order to 後面要直接加動詞,而且這邊用in order to 語意有點不順

4.And I am s student who study in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School那個一個學生用a

5.No matter what difficult thing happened,我覺得那個thing用複數比較好

6.singing the song are my hobbies那個用singing songs比較好

7.When I have the stress of examination,我覺得可以用When the examination put a lot of stress on me

8.moreover life is a long road I have to cross, why do not I live happily in the world.
那個moreover是副詞,前面分號,後面放逗號,而且我覺得可以用why not live happily in the world.

4:49 AM  
Blogger 傻咩 said...

And I am s student ...應該是a吧
And listening to music and singing the song are my hobbies.這邊接的怪怪的…

5:36 AM  
Blogger Tina said...

My mother is "an" earnest person
but she also must "does" chores
I am "a" student
I am "an" optimistic....

6:23 AM  

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