decision draft---1
Growing up means making my own decisions. Eighteen years old is old enough to decide what we can do. With my age older and older, I am independent day by day so I can not rely on other people any more. Therefore, I should learn how to make a decision for myself.
The hardest decision that I ever made was go to a cram school when I was the ninth grade. The ninth grade was the busiest time in junior high school. Because I had to study in school at night. On Saturday and Sunday, I must go to a cram school. Therefore, I almost stayed at cram school on weekends. So I did not have my own time to study another subjects. At that time, my father asked me, did I need to go to a cram school? In fact, I really did not want to go there. But I was afraid that my homework would get worsen if I did not go to a cram school. Finally, I made a decision for myself. I thought I should have my own time to study.

7 Comments:
感覺第二段沒有結論句好像怪怪的。
是不是忘了打阿?
1.With my age older and older, I am independent day by day so I can not rely on other people any more
"As I grow older and older day by day , I shouldn't rely on others any more." 就這樣
2.I should learn how to make "decision" for myself.
我覺得用複數比較好
3.my father asked me "if I need to go to a cram school"
4.大嬸!結論句咧?
my father asked me, did I need to ..>>asked me taht did I ...
1.On Saturday and Sunday, I must go to a cram school. 那個must是現在式,我覺得用had to比較好
2. my father asked me, did I need to go to a cram school?那個did前面用引號比較好
On Saturday and Sunday
改成on weekend比較順@@
是說你的心路歷程真的很長啊XD
my father asked me, did I need to go to a cram school? 把它改成一句吧!
my father asked me, did I need to ->asked me taht did I ...
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