哈比人

Saturday, September 22, 2007

I Am A Volunteer draft 1

I live in Taipei and work as a volunteer in a hospital. It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people. Yesterday moring, an old woman screamed loudly and asked for helping rescueher son. And I was confused with this situation. Then I determined to ask her what happened to her. She said that she did not have enough money to pay a medical bill and she requested the doctor to help her son, but the doctor just stared at her without saying anything. Finally, she gave up requesting for help. After I heard this situation, I was disappoint to this world. Though to pay a medical bill is a principle of seeing the doctor, to help people is doctor's responsibility. Therefore, I decided to develop my public mind to raise funds for this old woman. I yelled loudly for raising funds at the entrance of this hospital. Lastly I got enough money to pay medical bill for this old woman. And then this old woman appreciated me and gave me some fruit. Through this situation, I take on a new look to this world.

8 Comments:

Blogger FawnYma said...

1."I" really feel good to get the opportunity to help people.
2.and she "pleaded with" the doctor to help her son.
3.she gave up "pleading with the doctor" for help. 我覺得用plead 比較好
4."and" to help people is doctor's responsibility.
5."At last," I got enough money to pay medical bill for this old woman.
p.s. 在我"起肖"前,我終於進來了…

11:12 PM  
Blogger Samantha*霓∥ said...

asked for helping "rescueher" >>是rescue her吧?
I was "disappoint" to this world.>>disappointed

10:23 PM  
Blogger Ryuka(暐) said...

It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people.
這句怪怪的
主詞應該是I吧?

你是我看到第一個寫別的標題的人呢!

6:14 AM  
Blogger Butterfly said...

1. It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people人才會用feel吧

2.an old woman screamed loudly and asked for helping rescueher son.我覺得asked for help 就好了,而且你也看到你沒分好吧

3. She said that she did not have enough money to pay a medical bill and she requested the doctor to help her son, but the doctor just stared at her without saying anything. 我覺得既然主詞一樣可以用分詞構句來寫比較精簡。而且那個but應該可以自成一句

4.Though to pay a medical bill is a principle of seeing the doctor, to help people is doctor's responsibility這兩句放一起語意有點怪怪的,不知道你要表達什麼

5.最後給水果很爛耶,你說她沒錢了嗎,就給你個大擁抱就好了啊

8:05 AM  
Blogger Celia said...

It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people. 這句話的主詞應該是人吧。

4:17 AM  
Blogger 傻咩 said...

Lastly I got enough money to pay medical bill for this old woman.這句好怪喔…
真的…水果的這個點有點爛…

9:14 AM  
Blogger 梁宜靜 said...

1.. It really feels good to get the opportunity to help people->主詞是人吧!!
2..雖然給水果有點濫..但some fruit要寄的加s唷!

7:59 PM  
Blogger Tina said...

應該是人才會用feel吧!!
"rescue her"要分開喔!
I was "disappointed"
some "fruits"

6:43 AM  

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