An Unforgrttable Experience---draft 1
When I was seven years old, I was sent to a day care center. Therefore, I had to go a day care center after school. When I arrived there, it was about an afternoon. And the teachers requested the whole students to take a nap in a basement. After 30 minutes, I felt that I wanted to go a toilet, but I was too shy to go to pee pee alone. Then I decided to ask my friends who wanted to go a toilet. Nevertheless, no one answered me instead of sleeping. After that, I had no idea how to do it because I was hurry-skurry to pee pee. So I made a stupid method in order to solve my problem.
The method which I do is yelled loudly to make the teachers heard. In the end, the teachers heard my sound and lead me to a toilet. After solving my problem, I had had worried, I would have been blamed. Conversely, they consoled with me, and told me do not be shy. I think it is such an unforgettable experience to me because it is too ridiculous.

8 Comments:
I had to go a day care center after school.這裡的a day care center應該可以用there就好
哈哈~pee pee~
The method which I do "is" yelled loudly to make the teachers heard.->was
很爛的故事 ㄟ....
不知如何接...
1.The method which I do is yelled loudly to make the teachers heard要用過去式,後面那句很怪可以改成to make myself heard by my teacher
2.After solving my problem, I had had worried, I would have been blamed.整句很怪,我覺得可以用I was worried after I had solved my problem, because I thought I would be blamed.
3.they consoled with me, and told me do not be shy.我覺得那個and前面不用逗點,畢竟只是連接兩個句子,而且我覺得用現在式真的很怪,你自己想吧
The method which I "do" "is" >>did was
Pee pee 好可愛歐
The method which I "do is" yelled loudly to make the teachers heard.
應該是did was。
1.When I arrived there, it was about an afternoon. 我覺得用an afternoon 好怪
2.I decided to ask my friends "if they" wanted to go a toilet.
3.no one answered meinstead of sleeping. 我覺的改成" instead of answering me, they kept sleeping" 比較好
4.So I made a stupid "decision" in order to solve my problem.
5.The method which I do "was yell" loudly
which I "did" "was"
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